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Band 4.5

Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal a requirements. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, many individuals have thought that waste from the house is not recycled yet.
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 they contend that only legislation can compel people to manage their junk at home, I firmly disagree with that, and I will explain my few reasons.
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 with, law enforcement alone cannot effectively encourage people to be sustainable for the nation by recycling their household
wastage
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, as there is a lack of infrastructure where the individuals are living. The government ought to invest more to develop the facilities,
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 as separate dustbins, garbage collection services and
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recycling centres. Ergo,
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 tends to recycle the waste material immediately without keeping it for so long.
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,
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 leads to saving the environment by spreading aroma
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 of bad smell,
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 no chance for animals to eat garbage.
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, the United States had introduced a campaign for the residents rather than introducing a law which developed a daily collection service of garbage
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three types of dustbins for
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 waste and established recycling centres at a range of 100 K.M.
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, the authorities need to run the campaign in education
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as well as
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 spreading awareness may
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effect
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 better in terms of children and adults.
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 will surely generate an effective outcome rather than forcing
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society to follow the rules and regulations.
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, education centres,
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 business
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 ought to provide a kind of seminar which makes them strongly motivated to adopt a sustainable lifestyle for the long term.
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 may create negativity , but spreading awareness to humans via qualitative techniques would be better. As a paradigm, in 2020, Surat city was the cleanest city in India because almost 80% of households purchased dustbins, following an academic institution campaign. To draw the curtains, alone, the government cannot find success by enforcing the law. They need to provide a qualitative service,
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household trash.

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structure
Your view is clear. Add a short plan in the intro and a short wrap up in the end.
coherence
Make one point per paragraph. Use simple links to show how points follow.
content
Give a real, clear example. Explain how it backs your idea.
position
Clear view against the idea that only law can solve recycling.
content
Ideas on how to use bigger help: better places to sort waste and teach people.
example
Some real life examples used to back points.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government
  • law
  • rule
  • policy
  • enforce
  • penalty
  • incentive
  • education
  • information
  • bin
  • recycle
  • recycling
  • waste
  • home
  • people
  • city
  • town
  • cost
  • money
  • time
  • plan
  • idea
  • support
  • label
  • sort
  • collect
  • pollution
  • environment
  • decrease
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