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Buying things on the internet, such asbooks, air ticket and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, Most companies
becoming
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have their own marketing or selling
websites
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, because of the
increasing
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rapidly
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internet
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development.
People
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 tend to buy their needs
such
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 as books,
traveling
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travelling
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 tickets and
jeweleries
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jewellery
 from
website
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websites
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. In my opinion, buying their life usage
things
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 from
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internet
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the internet
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 with good research about its
quality
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 and
selling
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the selling
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 company can outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand,
instead
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 of visiting lots of departments, shops and supermarkets, buying
things
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 from
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internet
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the internet
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 and receiving
it
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them
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 at home
is
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absolutely saves
people
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’s time.
People
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 do not need to join traffic congestion just for some books or groceries.
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, especially in urban cities, if someone goes to buy a ticket from
airport
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the airport
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, they need to drive around four or five hours
for
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to
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only buy
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buy only
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 one ticket because of traffic congestion. The second biggest advantage of
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internet
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the internet
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 gives us is
connects
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connecting
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 our home into abroad. Most
people
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 cannot travel overseas very often, but with the help of
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the internet
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internet
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 we can bring
anytrhing
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anything
 from there into our desk.
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, I love to read books
,
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 that
does
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do
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 not sell in our local book stores. And international book
websites
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 give me the opportunity to buy any book.
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, there are
enormous
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 number of
things
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 on those
websites
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including
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with
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good and bad
quality
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 items. We need to explore
about
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the seller and
product’s
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the product’s
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 brand countries before purchase.
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,
in
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on
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the amazon
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amazon
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Amazon
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 shopping website, there are lots of same named products with different prices,
then
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 buying goods with only
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on its
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its
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their
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 picture is not enough to check
its
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their
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quality
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. We can only buy from trusted or famous brand
shop’s
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shops’
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websites
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 to
escaping
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avoid
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a
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poor
quality
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.
Moreover
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,
online
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the online
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 fraud industry is the
most scary
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scariest
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 thing to buy from
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internet
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the internet
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.
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, there are
people
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 who
uses
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use
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other’s
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others’
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 trust for bad
purpose
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purposes
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. They convince naive
people
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 to
selling
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sell
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 their fake products
with
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at
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high
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a high
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 price. To
summarize
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, online selling stores have both advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion,
people
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receiving
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 lots of advantages from
internet
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 shops
including
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 saving their time and having
bridge
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a bridge
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 from overseas into their home
,
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.
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 If we can prevent possible dangers. By increasing our attention
for
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to
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 buying
quality
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things
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 and
,
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 decreasing
amount
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the amount
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 of cheaters
over
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in
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 the
world
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world,
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 we can receive many advantages from it.

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planning
Plan your answer with a clear view at start and end. Put one idea in each paragraph and keep to one main point in each part.
grammar
Use short, easy to read sentences. Check for run on lines and fix long phrases.
coherence
Use linking words to show what is the same or different and to show order.
examples
Give simple, real examples and tell how they back your idea.
content
The writer shows a view that online shop has both good and bad parts.
structure
Intro and conclusion are there.
content
Some examples are used to back the points.
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