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Writing Samples
Band 4

The internet has changed everything in the world. Many people use it everyday. Give the advantages and disadvantages of the internet.

What do you know about
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internet
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the internet
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?
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Internet
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The Internet
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 has many
effect
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effects
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in
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on
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 our
socity
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society
.It has many advantages and
dis advantages
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disadvantages
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.In
this
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essay
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essay,
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i
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I
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 am going to
discased
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discuss
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 the good and
nigative
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negative
effect
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effects
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. The
internet
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 has many advantages
in
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for
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our
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apply
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humanity.First,
It
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it
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 learning us how we can do our
homeworks
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homework
. Second,we can know
a
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apply
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new information and get it
by
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from
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 the
internet
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.Third,we can donate some money to
man
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a man
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 who
take
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takes
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 care of .
Finally
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,
It
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it
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 may
changes
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change
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Both
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both
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 modes and
fellings
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feelings
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, or
makes
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make
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 somebody fellings happy .
and
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And
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 we can take some
Instractions
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instructions
 or many details in work or
anythings
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anything
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 we want
know
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to know
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 about it .
On the other hand
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 , the
internet
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 may have some disadvantages.
some
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Some
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 lights in
phone
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the phone
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causes
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cause
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ayes
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eye
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 problems and
weak
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a weak
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 body.
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Also
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Also,
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 it causes many problems and negative
effect
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effects
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in
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on
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 our brain and focus.Some people say that he used the
internet
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especially
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, especially
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phone
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the phone
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 and
laptob
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laptop
in
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, in
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 their day 14 hours , and
this
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 is the
bigest
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biggest
 and greatest
problems
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problem
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 in
daily
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their daily
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 routine .
Moreover
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, the
internet
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has
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also has
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also
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 bad effects
in
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on
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 our
works
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work
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,
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.
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 It makes us
felling
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feel
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 we do not have any time to do our homework . In conclusion , we should
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use
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 the
internet
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weisly
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wisely
, and do not waste our time
to do
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doing
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nothings
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nothing
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.
Altought
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Although
 we should be advised a people who
used
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use
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 the
internet
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in
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apply
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all day to avoid
this
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 in
his
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their
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 bad daily routine
.
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,
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and do not waste
his
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their
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 time
in
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on
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internet
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the internet
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 or something like that , like
mopile
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mobile
 phones and Pc or playstations.

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task response
Plan your essay. Say your view in the first paragraph. Each paragraph has one main idea. End with a short conclusion that repeats your view.
coherence cohesion
Make clear paragraphs. Use simple signs to show order, like first, next, also, but, finally. Keep one idea in each paragraph and link ideas well.
task response
You try to show both sides of the issue.
coherence cohesion
Some linking words are used to join ideas.
coherence cohesion
There is a short closing sentence.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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