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People often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in their lives. Why do you think this is? Whay measures can you suggest to make it easier

There is no doubt that currently
people
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 are not willing to accept the random
changes
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 in their lives
as
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, as
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there
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their
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 existing habits and routines can
empower
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provide
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the
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apply
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security
in
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for
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 them. I believe that these habits are welcoming numerous negativities into
people
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's
life
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 as
it
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they
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 often
triggers
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trigger
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 anxiety and stress.
This
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disconfortness
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discomfort
 needs
be
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to be
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 changed via following
curtain
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certain
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guidence
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guidance
, joining
kill-building
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the building
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 workshops and doing
regulair
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regular
 meditation.
This
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a
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 two main reasons
nehind
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behind
this
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 and
provides
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provide
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 appropriate solutions for it. There are two main reasons why
people
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 would like
stay
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to stay
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 in their
confort
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comfort
 zone
instead
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 of accepting the
changes
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.
Firstly
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, individual existing habits and routines are giving them
confortness
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comfort
and
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, and
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 they feel more secure
to being
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apply
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in the same routine
eventhough
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even though
 they know
this
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 change will give them great benefits.
For instance
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, a person who decided to wake up early morning
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to go
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 to
gym
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the gym
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 but their sleepy habit does not give them motivation.
Secondly
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, lack of confidence and self-efficacy can impede one's ability to adapt
new
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to new
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changes
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 as
individual
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an individual
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 might
be
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doubt their capability to manage new situations.
Thus
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,
this
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 sudden change causes them stress and pressure
which
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, which
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 would be the reason why
people
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 would not like to adapt
new
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to new
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thing
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things
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 in their lives.
However
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, every lock has made with key as every
problems
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problem
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have
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has
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 come with
the
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a
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solutions
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solution
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. By following certain
guidence
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guidance
 can easily solve
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people's
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their
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life
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lives
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. First and foremost, after the change, each person requires support from their family and
freinds
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friends
.
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, hiring a
counselors
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counsellor
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 can offer guidance and reassurance
which
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, which
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help
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helps
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 them to make
this
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adoptation
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adoption
 smoother.
Last
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 but not
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least
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,
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incorporating
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 relaxation techniques
such
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 as mindfulness or meditation can help reduce stress associated with new situations, facilitating adaptation.
Thus
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, by following
these
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this
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way
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way,
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 it would be much easier for
community
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the community
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 to adapt
the
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to the
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changes
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 in
people
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's
life
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lives
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.
To conclude
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,
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Although
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although
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changes
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is
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are
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 difficult, having
a
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apply
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proper
guidence
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guidance
 and support can make
this
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chnage
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change
more
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apply
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easier for
people
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. I believe that if
person
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a person
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who
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apply
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is willing to accept
this
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, they can achieve
great
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greater
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 success than those who do not want to adapt
new
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to new
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 situations in their lives

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task response
Plan and state your main idea in the intro. Then write two clear reasons with one idea in each paragraph. End with a short conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences. Keep each paragraph to one main idea. Add linking words to show how ideas are connected.
language improvement
Check spelling and grammar. Use short, simple sentences. Write in plain words.
evidence and examples
Give more exact examples that show the idea. Avoid general or vague talk.
focus and relevance
Stay on the topic; avoid extra and unclear ideas.
structure
There is a basic structure with introduction, body, and conclusion.
idea generation
The essay tries to give two causes and a fix.
evidence
An example is used to show one point.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Adaptation
  • Anxiety
  • Resistance
  • Cultural barriers
  • Self-efficacy
  • Stress management
  • Gradual exposure
  • Open-mindedness
  • Support network
  • Skill-building
  • Mindfulness
  • Meditation
  • Routine
  • Confidence
  • Environmental barriers
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