The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph depicts the
amount
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number
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of people participating in four different sports in a specified location between 1985 and 2005.
Overall
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, it is evident that rugby sport had a significant decline through the years,
whereas
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tennis developed gradually, but both basketball and badminton remained constant. In 1985, rugby had the highest number of
participants
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at 250
but
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then
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they
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it
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experienced a sudden decline in engagement as people decided to engage in other sports. They regressed to 50 people in 2005. In sharp contrast to rugby, tennis began
at
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with
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about 150 athletes in the first year
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then
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, then
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increased by roughly 30% each year
with
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, with
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a slight decrease between 1995 to 2000
but
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regardless
they
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, they
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ended with about 210
participants
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. Basketball and badminton share similar patterns in the chart
,
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.
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However
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, they have different
number
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numbers
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of
participants
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. Progressively, basketball started with 80
participants
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,
whereas
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badminton
was
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had
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slightly above 50.
Conversley
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Conversely
, they flowed in a slightly steady pattern through the chart that remained constant
ending
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, ending
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at figures similar to the first
years'
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year's
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words participants with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • popularity
  • demographics
  • sports
  • region
  • data
  • analysis
  • comparison
  • notable
  • overview
  • highest
  • lowest
  • 20-year period
  • particular
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