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The table below shows the estimated number of visitors to four historical museums in a European city between 2018 and 2023. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Chart Data 2018 2019 2020 2021 2022 2023 Museum 210000 225000 80000 150000 250000 275000 National History Museum 150000 160000 60000 120000 180000 200000 City Archaeological Museum 180000 190000 70000 130000 200000 220000 Museum of Industrial History 120000 130000 50000 90000 140000 160000 Local Folk Museum

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number
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 of
visitors
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 to four historical
museums
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:
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National
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the National
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History
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Museum
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,
City
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Archeological
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Museum
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,
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the Museum
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 of Industrial
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, and
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the Local
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 Folk
Museum
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.
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, the
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 of
visitors
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 has been mirroring the trends of visiting these
museums
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 in Europe over the
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past five
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 years.
National
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History
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museum
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 was the most preferred destination for
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and
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Local
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the Local
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 Folk
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 was the least among these. Between 2018 and 2023, there
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 continuous growth in the
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 of
visitors
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 except
2020
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in 2020
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. The
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 of
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 dropped drastically in 2020. The effect of
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 might be one of the causes for
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 downward curve. In 2023, people visited in the highest numbers to these
museums
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. In fine, people preferred visiting
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History
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Museum
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 and
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Museum
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the Museum
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 of Industrial
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 more than the other two
museums
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. Europe is considered the pioneer of
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the industrial
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industrial revolution
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.
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number
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 of
visitors
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Museum
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the Museum
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 of Industrial
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. The culture of Europe is known for its diversity.
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the National
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History
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Museum
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 the most.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, museums, history, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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