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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparision where relevent.

The line graph demonstrates
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the
 influx of
visitors
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 to a specific Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017,
categorizing
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 them into three
distnict
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distinct
 groups (
Visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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, staying on
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the isalnd
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isalnd
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island
 and the
aggerate
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aggregate
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 number of
visitors
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).
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable upward trends in the numbers of
touristis
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tourists
 across all three categories throughout the period in question. Another
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interesting
 point is that the
visitors
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 who choose
stay
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to stay
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 on
cruise
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ships
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 are the largest segment of the total.
in
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In
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 2010, the number of
visitors
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 on
cruise
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ships
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 was approximately 0.5
million
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,
whereas
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who
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those who
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 wanted
staying
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to stay
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 on
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the isalnd
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isalnd
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island
 were around
over
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apply
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0.5
million
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,
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;
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total
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the total
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numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
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 was 1
million
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. The number of
visitors
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 on
cruise
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 fluctuated for the next two years,
then
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 the trend rose sharply, reaching
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2
million
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 in 2017. On
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the
 other hand,
visitors
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 who stay on
island
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the island
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 slightly decreased over
same
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the same
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 year when
visitors
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 on
cruise
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ships
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 were increased in 2011,
then
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 the figure went up significantly until 2013 and
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reached
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 to highest point at around 2
million
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 people
stay
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staying
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 on
island
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the island
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. Having remained stable till 2015. After that figure
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apply
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fluctuated and
reach
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reached
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to
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the same point at 2
million
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 in 2017. The total
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
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 saw a considerable upward trend over the years
expext
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except
 in 2016.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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