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The pie charts below show favourite social media channels from 2011 to 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart indicates the
percentage
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 of people's
favourite
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 social
media
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channel
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channels
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 over the course of 3 years. From 2011 to 2013, there was a general trend that Facebook had the highest
percentage
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 of people
that
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who
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 chose it as their
favourite
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 social
media
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channel
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.
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, Twitter had the second highest
percentage
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 of
that
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chose
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who chose
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 it as their
favourite
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 social
media
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channel
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. From 2011 to 2013, 4 out of 5 channels
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such
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, such
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 as Twitter, LinkedIn, Google+ and
Pinterest
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Pinterest,
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 had a slight increase
of
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in
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percentage
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 between 2%
to
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apply
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5%
difference
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difference,
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that
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which
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 people chose
it
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apply
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as their
favourite
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 social
media
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channel
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. Contrastingly, even though Facebook had the highest
percentage
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, there was an
overall
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 significant decrease
of
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 59% in 2011 to 38% in 2013.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, favourite, media, channel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • trend
  • popularity
  • social media channel
  • data
  • overview
  • rise
  • decline
  • shift
  • platform
  • distribution
  • user preference
  • notable
  • significant change
  • comparison
  • highlight
  • survey
  • analysis
  • demographics
  • year-on-year change
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