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The pie charts below show favourite social media channels from 2011 to 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

There are three pie
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chart
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charts
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who
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that
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gives
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give
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favourite
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the favourite
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 social
media
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 channels from 2011 to 2013. With 5 different
kind
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kinds
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 of social
media
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 channels.
Such
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 as
,
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apply
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Facebook
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,
Pinterest
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, Twitter, LinkedIn, and Google+. As we can see in the
chart
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,
In
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2011
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2011,
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 almost everyone
choose
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chose
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Facebook
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for
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as
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 their
favorite
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favourite
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 social
media
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channels
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channel
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, with 59%
people
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says
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saying
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 that. In
addation
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addition
, there are only 10%
people
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 who
using
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use
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Pinterest
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 and
google+
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Google+
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, with both of them only
have
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having
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 5% individuals who
likes
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like
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 them.
However
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, there is a bit change in the
chart
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on
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in
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 2012, because
of
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apply
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Facebook
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lose
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lost
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 10%
persons
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people
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 who
says
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said
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this
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apllication
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application
 is their
favorite
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favourite
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.
Therefore
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, there are only 49%
people
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says
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say
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 that it's their
specials
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special
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 social
media
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. Meanwhile,
Pinterest
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still
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is still
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in
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at
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 the bottom of the
chart
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 with only 6%
people
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prefered
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preferring
this
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.
On the other hand
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, there are a lot of
change
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changes
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 in 2013.
Due to
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 many
persons
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people
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change
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changing
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 their
favorite
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favourite
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 social
media
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.
Such
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 as in
Facebook
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, they
lose
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lost
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 eleven
percent
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per cent
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chart
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in
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apply
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this
Linking Words
years
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year
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.
Although
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majority
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the majority
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people
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of people
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 still use
this
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 for their
favorite
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favourite
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 social
media
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.
More over
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,
Pinterest
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still
Verb problem
is still
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in
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at
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 the bottom of the
chart
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 with only 8%.
As a result
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,
people
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 have a
differents
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different
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 kind of
favorite
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favourite
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 social
media
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 every
years
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year
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, media, facebook, pinterest, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • trend
  • popularity
  • social media channel
  • data
  • overview
  • rise
  • decline
  • shift
  • platform
  • distribution
  • user preference
  • notable
  • significant change
  • comparison
  • highlight
  • survey
  • analysis
  • demographics
  • year-on-year change
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