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Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Whether job applicants’ social
skills
 are more important than their academic
qualifications
 is a much-debated issue and
employers
' opinions, regarding
this
, vary. I agree with the opinion that the social
skills
 of candidates are more vital than their academic results, and in
this
 essay, I will explain the reason for
this
 belief. The benefits of excellent social
skills
 of a job seeker are apparent.
Firstly
, communication is the key to career success in modern days.
This
 is primarily because the 21st century is best portrayed by constant interaction with different people, no matter the communication media - in person or online.
Secondly
, the ability to sell products or services is of paramount significance in any business –
this
 requires strong social
skills
.
For example
, an employee with excellent social
skills
 is able to have an impact in front of customers or clients;
as a result
, products or services can be perceived as high-value.
Furthermore
, employees with better social
skills
 are generally more easy-going, which is very important to the workplace, including the employer. After all, as the saying goes, “
Who
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 you work with is as important as what you do.” – An enjoyable work environment needs socially skilful employees.
In contrast
, some
employers
 may claim that academic
qualifications
 are the prerequisite of employment. Apparently, many positions require certain academic
qualifications
.
However
, in modern-day society, more and more
employers
 have realised that whether employees can get the results that the business wants is the key to a business’s success. It can be seen that
qualifications
 do not play a key role in
this
 regard. In conclusion, I believe employees’ social
skills
 are of extreme importance for a company or organisation.
Also
, I would suggest
employers
 consider job applicants’ social
skills
first
, which I believe would bring long-term benefits for the company and make a positive impact.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gap year
  • Non-academic life
  • Resume
  • Job market
  • Personal development
  • Broaden their worldviews
  • Academic pressures
  • Renewed focus
  • Loss of academic momentum
  • Career goals
  • Informed decisions
  • Soft skills
  • Communication
  • Problem-solving
  • Adaptability
  • Financial burden
  • Prolonged break
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