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The pie charts below show favourite social media channels from 2011 to 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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These bar charts illustrate the favourite social media channels, comparing the figures over the given
period
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 from 2011 to 2013.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Facebook showed the highest proportion throughout the
period
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, despite demonstrating a downward trend.
In addition
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, social media channels
such
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 as Twitter,
Linkedin
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LinkedIn
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, Google+ and Pinterest witnessed an
overall
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 upward trajectory over time. In terms of social media, Facebook declined steadily from 59% in 2011 to 49% in 2012,
it
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and it
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 eventually dropped to 38% by the end of the
period
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.
This
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 showed an
overall
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 downward trend.
By
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contrast
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contrast,
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 Twitter climbed steadily from 21% in 2011 to 23% in 2012 and
finally
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 rose to 25% in 2013.
Besides
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,
Linkedin
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LinkedIn
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 increased gradually from approximately 10% in 2011 to 12% in 2012, reaching 15%
at the end
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 of the
period
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.
Moreover
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, Google+ followed a similar upward trend, rising from 5% in 2011 to 10% in 2012, and continued to rise steadily to 14% in 2013.
Furthermore
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, Pinterest increased gradually from 5% in 2011 to 6% in 2012, and rose steadily to 8% over time.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • trend
  • popularity
  • social media channel
  • data
  • overview
  • rise
  • decline
  • shift
  • platform
  • distribution
  • user preference
  • notable
  • significant change
  • comparison
  • highlight
  • survey
  • analysis
  • demographics
  • year-on-year change
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