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The maps provide kay infromation about the the floor plan of apublic library 20 years ago and present.

The maps provide
kay
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key
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infromation
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information
 about
the
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the floor plan of
apublic
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a public
 library 20 years ago and present.
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, it is clear from the plan that the library became more developed and organised over time, with the addition of several modern facilities and
clear
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a clear
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 layout.
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 what is shown in the first map, in
the
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front of the
entrance
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entrance,
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 there were two
tabels
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tables
 and chairs. On the right side near
from
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the entrance, there
were
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was
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enquiry
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an enquiry
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desk
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 (tickets, book returns, etc.). Next to the
desk
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, there were
section
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sections
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 for
adult
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non-ficition
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non-fiction
books
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 and children's
books
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. On the left side, there
were
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was
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 a reading
room
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 for newspapers and magazines,
adult
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 fiction
books
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, and CDs, videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games. In the new map, the enquiry
desk
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 was
repalced
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replaced
 by
cafe
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a cafe
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. Next to the cafe, there was
information
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an information
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desk
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marged
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merged
 with
adult
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 fiction
books
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 and
self-service
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a self-service
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 machine. Children's
books
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was
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were
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 converted to
lecture
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a lecture
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room
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. On the left side, there was a computer
room
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instant
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instead
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 of
reading
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a reading
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room
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.
Also
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,
adult
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ficition
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fiction
books
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was
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were
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change
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 to all reference
books
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. On the left corner, there was a computer
games
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game
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 with
evenys
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events
 to storytelling.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words desk, adult, books, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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