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The maps provide key information about the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and present.

The maps provide key information about the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and present.
Overall
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, it is clear from the plan that the library became more developed and organised over time, with the addition of several modern facilities and a clear layout.
According to
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 what is shown in the first map, in front of the entrance, there were two tables and chairs. On the right side near the entrance, there was an enquiry
desk
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 (tickets, book returns, etc.). Next to the
desk
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, there were sections for
adult
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 non-fiction
books
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 and children's
books
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. On the left side, there was a reading
room
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 for newspapers and magazines,
adult
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 fiction
books
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, and CDs, videos, and computer games. In the new map, the enquiry
desk
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 was replaced by a cafe. Next to the cafe, there was an information
desk
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 merged with
adult
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 fiction
books
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 and a self-service machine. Children's
books
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 were converted
to
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into
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 a lecture
room
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. On the left side, there was a computer
room
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instead
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 of a reading
room
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.
Also
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,
adult
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 fiction
books
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 were changed to all reference
books
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.
On
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In
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 the left corner, there was a computer game with events
to
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for
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 storytelling.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words desk, adult, books, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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