IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the quantity of
petroleum
Use synonyms
, coal, and natural
gas
Use synonyms
 that were manufactured in the UK between 1981 and 2000. The amount is measured in
energy
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
, where 1 unit refers to the
energy
Use synonyms
 obtained from a million tonnes of oil.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is seen that
petroleum
Use synonyms
 manufacturing was much higher than coal and natural
gas
Use synonyms
 throughout the years.
Petroleum
Use synonyms
production
Use synonyms
 in 1981 was approximately 90
energy
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
, after which it experienced a surge to 140
energy
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
 around 1985, where it
proved
Verb problem
remained
show examples
 steady until about 1988.
Then
Linking Words
 it showed a significant reduction and was only 100
energy
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
 in 1991. Afterwards,
petroleum
Use synonyms
 manufacture began to slowly increase and was back to 140
energy
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
 in the year 1996. It remained steady till the year 2000. Coal
production
Use synonyms
 was
initially
Linking Words
 at 80
energy
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
 in 1981, and in 1983, it experienced a sharp decline to under 40
energy
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
. It gradually increased , and by 1986, it was about 60
energy
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
 and remained the same until 1989,
where
Correct word choice
when
show examples
 it showed a continual slow reduction in coal
production
Use synonyms
. By 2000, it was only about 30
energy
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
 that were being manufactured.
Lastly
Linking Words
, natural
gas
Use synonyms
 was estimated to be 40
energy
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
 in 1981 , and
this
Linking Words
 figure barely changed until
1990
Punctuation problem
1990,
show examples
 when it began to show a steady increment in
production
Use synonyms
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
 by the year 2000, natural
gas
Use synonyms
production
Use synonyms
 was around 100
energy
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, gas, energy, units, production with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
What to do next:
Look at other essays: