In contemporary society, everyone should have equal opportunities in education. Therefore, universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that in contemporary society

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men

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and

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should have the same opportunities regarding

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. For that

reason

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universities would have to receive the same

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number

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of males and females for each

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career

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However

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is a very controversial topic that creates different opinions.

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, some

poeple

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people

might think that giving

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and

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the same

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would lead to an unbalanced work system, in which there would not be a clear gender division

resulting

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in unfair salaries and unmotivation.

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loves

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and has dedicated his entire life to it is studying a major in sports and business with a

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does not care about sports but thought it would be an easy career.

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the

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and the

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would get the same

eduation

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education

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as a

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result

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the

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could have more success in

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job, which would be unfair for the

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who has worked his entire life to get there.

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others think the complete opposite, believing that if

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and

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dont

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don't

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opportunities

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would create inequality for both genders.

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in the same situation as

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if a

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wants to study sports and

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business

but she is not allowed to do so by her

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gender,

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would result in

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unfair treatment.

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Nevertheless

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if the

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the opportunity to study

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career

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it would just motivate the

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to try harder

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would lead to a fairer

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for both genders. Both of

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opinions are very different from one another.

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I agree more with the second one. Since I think that the reason for

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inequality is not the

females

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males

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male

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ability to enforce certain careers but the social belief of what

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and

women

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can or

cant

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. In

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I believe that giving

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and

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the same

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opportunities would break

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stereotypes and make the contemporary world a more inclusive one.

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Feb 9, 2026

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State your view clearly at the start. In the intro, say you agree or partly agree and how you will show this.

coherence

Make your body ideas clear. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence that tells the main idea.

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Use 1 or 2 strong examples for each point and explain how they back your view.

coherence

Link the ideas with easy words like and, but, also, then to show flow.

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The essay shows a clear view and a consistent effort to discuss the topic.

coherence

There is effort to compare sides and to give a conclusion.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

334 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Equal opportunities
Gender equality
Stereotypes
Diverse
Gender disparity
STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
Humanities
Quotas
Reverse discrimination
Meritocracy
Tokenism
Workforce
Leadership roles
Aptitude-based
Scholarships
Economic growth
Innovation
Social stability
Comparative analysis

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