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In many western countries there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couple having no children?

There is no denying
fact
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the fact
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 that there is a rising number of couples deciding to remain without
children
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 in a wide range of
western
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Western
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 countries.
While
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is it
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it is
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 a commonly
belief
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believed
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 that staying childless offers freedom and
lower
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lowers
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 the
parents's
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parents'
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 responsibilities, there is
also
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 an argument that having kids is vital for
society
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society's
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 growth.
This
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 essay will analyse
this
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 topic from both points of view. On one hand, the growing life challenges and the ongoing economic
pandamic
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pandemic
 in the
west
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West
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,
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apply
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 led numerous families to choose not to have
children
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.
In other words
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,
this
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 will decrease their expenses and duties.
In addition
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, having
children
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 will hinder them
achieving
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from achieving
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 their life goals and limit their freedom.
For example
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, if both partners like to travel several times a year, having kids will obstruct their plans, and they will need
each time
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apply
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to look where to keep them
, or
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each time, or
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 alternatively, travel with them, which will create additional charges and distractions
intead
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instead
 of focusing on the business trips or chilling calmly during holidays.
On the other hand
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, having
children
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 is imperative for the
socieoconomic
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socio-economic
 development. It is
also
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 possible to say that if everyone decides to stay without giving birth to any child, there would be no social progress, as the youth workforce is crucial and
represent
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represents
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 the backbone of development for all nations.
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, the experience of being a father or a mother is priceless.
For instance
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, we frequently hear about the
parent's
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parents'
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 emotions when holding their
new born
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newborn
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 for the first time, and how the feeling is incredibly insane and that there are no words to describe it
so
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, so
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 they simply cry
of
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with
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 happiness. In conclusion,
while
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 staying childless may be more convenient for certain partners, there are
also
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 notable drawbacks
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such
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, such
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 as social decline.
Overall
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,
this
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 issue presents both positive and negative impacts depending on the circumstances.

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grammar/vocabulary
Fix basic grammar and spelling errors that slow reading, such as 'pandamic', 'commonly belief', 'socieoconomic'. Use simple, correct forms.
coherence
Use clear linking words to show how ideas connect. Words like first, also, however, for example, and finally help readers follow your point.
structure
Make a clear opinion in the introduction and end with a strong conclusion that restates your view.
content
The essay tries to show both sides of the issue, which is good for task response.
content
Examples are used to support some points.
structure
There is an attempt to give a clear conclusion.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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