The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart provides key information about the
number
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of
shops
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that closed and the
number
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of new
shops
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that opened in a country, in the years running from 2011 to 2018. The units are measured in numbers.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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2011 had the highest
number
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of centres that
openings
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opened
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,
whereas
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2013 had the highest
number
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of closures.
According to
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what is shown from the graph
in
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, in
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2011
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2011,
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the
number
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of open
shops
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was more than 8,000
and
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the
number
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of closed
shops
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was close to 6,500.The
number
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of closures
was
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increase
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,
reashing
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reaching
nearly 7,000 in 2013. After that, there was a sharp
decreas
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decrease
,
arrived at
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reaching
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less than 1,000 in 2015.
Then
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, the line rose again,
accounted
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for 5,000 from 2016 to 2018. In terms of the
openings
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opening
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shops
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of shops
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, it is noticeable there was a dramatic decline,
tuching
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touching
4,000 in 2012.
Next,
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there
were
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a gradual increase
hit
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to 6,000 in 2014. It is
evidenc
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evident
that the line decreased again
dropped
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and dropped
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to 4,000 in 2005, and remained stable from 2015 to 2017, and declined again.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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