The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts provide key information about the online
sales
Use synonyms
for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 compared with 2013. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
the travel category had the highest percentages in 2003,
whereas
Linking Words
the books trade had the lowest. In 2013, film/music had the highest proportion, and clothes represented the opposite.
According to
Linking Words
what is shown in the graph, in 2003, travel
sales
Use synonyms
reached 36%.
Also
Linking Words
, it is noticeable that the online
sales
Use synonyms
for clothes accounted for 24%.
Then
Linking Words
, film/music had 21%.
Next,
Linking Words
book
sales
Use synonyms
arrived at only 19%. It is evident in 2013 that
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
travel
sales
Use synonyms
in New Zealand decreased, reaching 36%,
while
Linking Words
the film/music
sales
Use synonyms
had a significant increase, nearly 33 percentage. Book
sales
Use synonyms
account for 22%. But
on the other hand
Linking Words
, there was a decline in
sales
Use synonyms
of clothes, touching 16%.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: