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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

Nowadays,
English
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 has become a staple in
work places
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 and in
day to day
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 life conversations, but as a
community
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community,
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 how can we live
on
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without our local language
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 what makes every country unique
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therefore
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 we can't neglect it from being learnt
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 schools worldwide. People should strive to learn
English
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 as it's strongly going to help the new genaration achieve goals they never dreamed of doing, like me a student from Saudia Arabia learning, i'm always trying to increase my
English
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 vocabulary in hope to get into Stanford university in the US, but in order to do that you would need to have a very high level of
English
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.
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 it doesn't mean that you should take your local language for granted, it what makes every country different for each other, something that bring me comfort is knowning that Arabic is one the most beautiful languages there are and it's what my parents spoke and what my grandparent spoke too
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 it shall be studied in schools for genarations ahead, and can assure you of that because it's in the muslim holy book the Quran which is practiced daily. In
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 schools should always be teaching their students
English
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 because it's the
landuage
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language
 of the future and is a necessity for college, but can never neglect their local language as it's part of the
countries
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country's
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 history

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Task guidance
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep it in a simple sentence.
Coherence
Link ideas with simple words like 'and', 'but', or 'also' to keep ideas tied.
Development
Give one or two clear examples for each point to prove your view.
Language
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content
The writer shows how English can help with goals in life.
tone
The writer keeps some care for local language and culture.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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