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It is thought by some that a school teacher’s role is to motivate and inspire students. However, other people believe that a teacher’s primary role is to pass on knowledge. What do you think is the role of a teacher?

In the modern world, there is
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 to pass on
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to motivate
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 and inspire
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students
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. The issue has become increasingly relevant in today's educational
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societies
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 I'll present my own opinion.
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, some people support that a
school
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teacher
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role
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 is to motivate and
inspire
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inspire,
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 as
students
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 can gain
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knowledge
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internet
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 they can't do motivation and inspiration from
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, they argue that
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students
 can't learn
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efficiently
 without any motivation.
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, in many countries, there are many
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 who give up studying as they
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don't
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 even though teachers pass on sufficient
knowlege
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knowledge
 to them.
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, others support that a
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 educator's primary
role
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 is to pass on
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. I personally agree because
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 is a main place for education and
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a school
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teacher
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 is to teach
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Moreover
, the other main reason is
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by
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acquiring
knowledge
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internet
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 can't lead
students
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 to gain flexible thoughts.
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the internet
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 usually offers just answers. But teachers can pass on
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 to
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 by asking them to think
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for themselves
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 and make
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an answer
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, which
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makes
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students
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 have
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flexible
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the situation
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.
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 various
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 and asking
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, which
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helps
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students
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 to
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apply
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make decisions themselves and solve
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problems. In conclusion, it is undeniable that
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 can be controversial.
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 I believe
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teacher's
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the teacher's
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 main
role
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 is
pass
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to pass
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 on
knowledge
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 to
students
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. because they give
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 to
studetns
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students
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variable
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various
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 ways, which
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helps
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students
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 to understand
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 easily and have flexible thoughts.

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Your view is clear but the plan is not fully put in a strong way. Say your main view early and add 2 or 3 clear reasons.
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Link each idea to your view with easy words. Use clean steps to show how you think.
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Finish with a short, clear end that restates your view.
coherence cohesion
Intro has ideas but some word mistakes. Check spell and make a clean start.
coherence cohesion
Use small, separate paragraphs for new ideas. Use easy link words like First, Then, Also, Finally.
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Give clear examples that go with your point. Make the example easy to see as you write.
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You state your own view, not only talk about others.
coherence cohesion
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
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You try to use examples to support your idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Motivate
  • Inspire
  • Encourage
  • Critical thinking
  • Curiosity
  • Fundamental role
  • Academic success
  • Professional growth
  • Independent learning
  • Moral and ethical values
  • Well-rounded
  • Socially responsible
  • Facilitator
  • Interactive learning environment
  • Engagement
  • Incorporating technology
  • Enthusiastic
  • Tailoring teaching methods
  • Diverse learning styles
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