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The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the number of international
students
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 studying in Australia from Asian countries, namely
Indonesia
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,
Hong
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Kong
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, Malaysia and
Singapore
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 between 1982 and 2000. Figures are given in thousands.
Overall
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,
students
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 from all countries increased over the
period
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.
Indonesia
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 showed the most dramatic growth and became the largest group of overseas
students
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 in the late year,
while
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 Malaysia showed a more gradual rise and remained comparatively lower. At the beginning of the
period
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, in 1982, enrolments from
Indonesia
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,
Singapore
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, and
Hong
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Kong
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 were very low, starting at nearly zero.
Indonesia
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’s figures rose gradually during the 1980s before increasing sharply after 1994, reaching a peak of approximately 27,000 in 1998.
Although
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 the number fell slightly to about 23,000 in 2000, it remained the highest in
final
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the final
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period
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.
Hong
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Kong
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 saw a rapid increase to roughly 10,000
students
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, overtaking both
Indonesia
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 and
Singapore
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 around 1990, before peaking at nearly 18,000 in 1997, before declining modestly towards the end of the
period
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.
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, Malaysia began with around 5,000
students
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 in 1982, the highest at that time before levelling off at around 7,000
students
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 until the early 1990s, after which it increased considerably to about 18,000 by 2000.
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,
Singapore
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 grew gradually throughout the
period
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, finishing at roughly 19,000
students
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, slightly above
Hong
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Kong
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 but below
Indonesia
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, indonesia, hong, kong, singapore, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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