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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss Both views and give your opini

Advertising has been a topic of debate in today's modern world. Some argue that
advertisings
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advertising
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are
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is
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convinceing
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convincing
 individuals to purchase things,
while
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 others believe that
they
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it
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are
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does
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 not influence
people
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's attitudes.
This
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essey
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essay
 will
outiline
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outline
 the reasons for two views, and explain why advertisements have played a successful role
to motivate
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in motivating
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 communities to be
consumerism
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consumerist
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.
To begin
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 with, advertising companies throughout either social media or billboards influence
societies
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society's
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 artificial and hidden needs. They use big and colourful billboards in locations which are crowded
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such
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, such
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 as the heart of big cities and public transport systems, and show products on various social media
including
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, including
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Tik Tok
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 and Instagram, which can attract
people
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's attention to buy regardless of money and needs.
Furthermore
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, using
famouse
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famous
 celebrities to influence emotions and
behaviors
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 is another way to convince communities, as they give positive
fellings
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feelings
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 to
persude
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persuade
people
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, buying things
such
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 as branded clothes that celebrities wear
them
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apply
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.
However
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, certain groups think that advertisements have never
influnced
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influenced
human's
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humans'
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 trends and
attetudes
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attitudes
 because of many reasons.
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, an increasing number of
people
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 in
this
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fast-faced
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fast-paced
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 world are
awear
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aware
 and have information, as they are
multi-literacy
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multiliterate
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. They
realize
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realise
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 that the major
purpos
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purpose
 of advertising is just increasing their
sells
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sales
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, which they
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, in
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first
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the first
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step
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step,
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 use emotional values, and
thus
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, increasing their gross profit.
Secondly
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, the majority of
people
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 have had
negative
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a negative
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 experience after buying products, misleading
advertisments
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advertisements
 in their mind at that time. A suit,
for example
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, that a person
buy
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buys
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 it via
introducing
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being introduced
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 in an
advertisment
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advertisement
 that
an
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a
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famouse
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famous
acter
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actor
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wear
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wears
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 it,
while
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 it does not have high quality, and
hence
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,
disappearing
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draws
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 their attention to
advers
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the advertisement
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 forever. In conclusion,
although
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 the certain aim of advertising is
growing
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to grow
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sells
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sales
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 of productions in communities throughout different strategies
such
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 as online platforms and celebrities, I think
nowedays
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nowadays
 they would not
achive thier
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achieve their
 goal, because it is likely more
people
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 are
knowlegable
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knowledgeable
 and aware about each trend and circumstance.

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grammar
Work on grammar and spelling to avoid wrong word form and meaning.
coherence
Use simple connect words to link ideas; this makes your plan easy to follow.
task response
State your view clearly in the opening and repeat it in the end.
examples
Give stronger, clear examples and explain how they prove your point.
lexical
Use common words from your list and check the basic word form before you write.
structure
Keep the length close to the essay task and avoid too much side idea.
content
Essay tries to show two sides and a view.
structure
There is a plan with an intro, body and conclusion.
content
Examples like social media and celebs are used to support points.
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