The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day

The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day
The
tow
Use the right word
two
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maps
illustrates
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
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the external and internal changes in the design of a health
center
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centre
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that happened from 2005 until the present day. In the beginning, the health care facility
at
Change preposition
in
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2005
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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was smaller in size in
comparizon
Correct your spelling
comparison
with the updated changes.
Moreover
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, from the outside
the
Punctuation problem
, the
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parking lots were 12 .And, the entrance was on the front of the building ,
then
Linking Words
there was the reception desk
at the end
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of the hall.
Also
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, there were
three
Correct word order
only three
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consulting rooms
only
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apply
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.
In addition
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, there was
a
Correct article usage
apply
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one big room for Physiotherapy , and next to it
is
Wrong verb form
was
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the Office room.
On the other hand
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, the new
center
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centre
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is bigger with additional rooms .
For example
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, now there are four Consulting rooms , and they
builds
Wrong verb form
are building
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a new one for the Minor Operations .
Furthermore
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, they
changes
Wrong verb form
changed
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the location of the reception area and the entrance and put it on the corner.
Also
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, they add a new area for the children to play inside . To
summarize
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summarise
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, the new building is better
on
Change preposition
at
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handling
patient
Fix the agreement mistake
patients
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and
give
Wrong verb form
giving
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service to all of them in an
orgnized
Correct your spelling
organised
way .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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