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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts show different costs
afforded
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incurred
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 by a particular school in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom during three different years. From an
overall
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 view,
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teachers
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teachers'
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salaries
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 are the major reason for spending
money
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money,
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while
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,
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apply
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 insurance represents the minor costs during the examined periods. In 1981 school spent 40% of
money
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its money
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for
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on
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teachers
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teachers'
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salaries
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, 28%
for
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on
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 other
workers
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workers'
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 payments and 15%
for
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on
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 other resources like books. During
1991
Punctuation problem
1991,
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teachers
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'
salaries
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 increased from
the
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apply
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40% to
the
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apply
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50% of the total costs,
such
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 as
rewsources
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resources
. Oppositely, furniture and
equipements
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equipment
, like other
workers
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workers'
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salaries
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, decreased. During
2001
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2001,
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teachers
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'
salaries
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 had a
little
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slight
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 decrease from 50% to 45%.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, there was a significant increase
of
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in
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furnitures
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furniture
 and equipment, from 5% to 23%. Oppositely,
Ooher
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Other
 workers'
salaries
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 and resources respectively decreased from 22% to 15% and from 20% to 9%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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