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Some people argue that art classes should become compulsory in high school education. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

In the modern world, there is an ongoing debate about whether
art
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 classes should become compulsory in high school
educaion
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education
.
This
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 issue has become increasingly relevant in today's
education
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. I strongly agree that
art
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 lessons should become compulsory because
it
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helps
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help
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students
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 to relieve
stress
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 and discover
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unacademic
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non-academic
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 abilities.
First,
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Some
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some
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 people support that
art
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 lessons should be compulsory in high school
education
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, because
it
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they
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 can help
students
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 to
relive
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relieve
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stress
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. In many countries, almost
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students
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all students
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 have studied only academic
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 for their future. Studying only
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academic
 parts makes them feel bored about
study
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, which
make
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makes
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students
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 experience
stress
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.
On the other hand
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, when they take the
art
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 lessons, it will help them to
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stress
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, which can
lead
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 them to refresh for their studying.
On the other hand
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, other people may support that
art
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 class should not be compulsory because academic
education
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 is more important in
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the job
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 market.
However
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, I personally think
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educaion
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education
 is
also
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 significant in
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the job
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 market.
Moreover
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, it can be
good
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a good
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 source to discover
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ablities
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abilities
. There are numerous
students
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 who have
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 abilities,
such
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 as
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, music and sports. The unprecedented number of
students
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 cannot
realize
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 that they have other outputs, but
art
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 classes can help them to figure out their new productivity. In conclusion, it is undeniable that
art
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 classes should become necessary in high school
education
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. But, I firmly agree with
this
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 view because it will be helpful for
students
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 to
exprience
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experience
 less
stress
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 and find out their
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unacademic
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non-academic
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 outputs.

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task response
Make your main idea clear in the intro and keep it in all parts. Add one sentence in each paragraph to show the same point.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence and end with a short note that sums up the idea.
task response
You show a clear view and take a stand.
coherence
Your essay uses simple linking words to show order and flow.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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