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The map describes the development of a college campus in 2005 and 2015.

The
map
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 below illustrates the improvement of a college campus
within
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over
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 a
ten year
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 gap.
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, it is evident that new infrastructures have been constructed over the decade, focusing on the art departments, science and
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students
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students'
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appartments
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apartments
,
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.
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However
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However,
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 there
seem
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 to be little development on the lake. The art building is located
north east
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northeast
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 on the
map
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, beside a
road
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 that runs through to the school area. Left of the arts
department
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 accommodates the science
department
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, which contains two large buildings. The
first
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,
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 is the science building where
students
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 of
this
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department
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 have their lectures and perform other school activities
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whereas
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, whereas
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 the second building is allocated for the
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students
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students'
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 accommodation.
This
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 building is divided into two
which
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, which
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 are probably for different genders in the
department
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 or as a means to accommodate more
students
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. On the other side of the
road
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, there are two
buildngs
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buildings
 not described and a lake. The building on the far end of the
map
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close
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, close
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 to the
road
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 adjacent to the
trees
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trees,
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 is the student facility sector. In
this
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are
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area
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students
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, students
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 do their regular shopping
and
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, and
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 there are other offices in
this
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 building as well.
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, the lake is right behind
this
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 building and
doesnt
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doesn't
 seem to have been developed over the years.
Lastly
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, we have the
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students
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students'
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accomodation
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accommodation
which
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, which
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 is
on
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in
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 the
south eastern
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southeastern
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 part of the
map
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 that has a
road
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 leading to it.
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,
this
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 building accommodates more
students
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 from a variety of departments.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, students, road, department with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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