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it is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what soft of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

In many cases bring up
child
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's
behavior
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 would
diffirent
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differ
, as
parents
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parents'
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method
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past
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passed down
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 from their
great parents
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. Like,
two
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families
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families'
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 education skills
did
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 not similar to each other. Meanwhile, some of the modern families
understands
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understand
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child's
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children's
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 feelings about all situations. Back to the topic, it is necessary to teach things that
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child
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 should
to
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learn. With many
aspects
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 maybe
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child
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the child
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 will be in order and educationally.

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direction
State your view on the topic clearly at the start and keep it in every part of the essay.
structure
Give two or three simple reasons and a short example for each reason.
coherence
Divide your writing into clear paragraphs and use linking words to move from one idea to the next.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar, and use the best word form for each sentence.
content
The writer tries to talk about the topic.
style
The words used are easy to read.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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