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Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

In recent times,
graffiti
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art
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 has been of considerable interest in
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society. Some individuals believe that cities should create spaces for
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 type of
art
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,
whereas
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 others think it should be abolished. In
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 essay, I will elucidate both views and give my opinion. On the one hand, it is important to understand that as a society or
community
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 we are a diverse group of
people
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 living together
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thus
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, not all individuals would share equal views or ideas on some practices. Coining
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 down to the topic at hand, the
graffiti
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art
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 may be unsuitable to some citizens for a variety of reasons
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 the invaluability to some
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, by
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, some citizens do not see the value of the
art
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 simply because they
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are not
art
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 inclined. More so, the type of message displayed on the
art
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; most
graffiti
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 arts are
percieved
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perceived
 as a rebellious movement,
due to
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 some representations interpreted in movies. A research study on
graffiti
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artists
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 showed that the majority of these
artists
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 made the
art
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 for rebellious purposes, as a message to oppose policies implemented by the government.
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, some of these arts can cause damage to some
people
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's personal property.
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 some delinquents can spray-paint on
people
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's cars or
garrage
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garage
 doors.
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,
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 is a beautiful form of
art
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 if regulated properly.
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, if the cities provide specific areas for these artworks,
artists
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 in
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 field would have the autonomy to create exceptional
art
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 pieces without
vandalizing
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people
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's properties.
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, intentional locations of these artworks
creates
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create
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 a beautiful scenery in the society which can attract tourists and
as well
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also
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 generate revenue for the locals in the community.
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, it promotes employment opportunities for these
artists
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 as their works are being advertised in these selected spaces.
To conclude
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, I am totally against the abolishment of
graffiti
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 arts in the city as it has more advantages than
it's
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 drawbacks, which include
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increase
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employment
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the employment
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 rate for
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 and
promotes
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 tourism.

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task
Try to use one clear plan in the intro and end with a short view sentence.
content
Give more real and clear reasons for both sides and connect them to your view.
grammar
Fix misspelling, keep word choice simple and correct grammar.
coherence
Each paragraph should have one main idea that links to the next.
content
Use examples that are easy to see and explain why they show your point.
grammar
Check punctuation and sentence length.
structure
The essay shows a clear view and uses 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' well.
content
There are ideas about how graffiti can be good if regulated, which is useful.
final
Conclusion states your stance.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban art
  • vandalism
  • vibrancy
  • aesthetic
  • decline
  • creative expression
  • cultural asset
  • legal ramifications
  • marginalized groups
  • community engagement
  • ethical considerations
  • gentrification
  • zoning regulations
  • public space
  • civic responsibility
  • curated walls
  • street artists
  • social commentary
  • property rights
  • anti-graffiti coatings
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