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Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are - drivers are late and reckless • explain how these problems are affecting you - I am late to work and miss my jhalf day. • suggest what you would like the company to do - should be punctual and p

Dear Manager, I am writing
this
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 letter to mention a
concerns
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concern
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 that I am facing with your company.
Firstly
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,
It's
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it's
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 been a regular practice that
bus
Correct article usage
the bus
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 is always late every morning,
due to
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this
Correct determiner usage
the
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 driver drives recklessly to cover the distance and
risking
Wrong verb form
risks
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 every
individual life's
Correct word order
individual's life
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. Plus, there are many
safetly
Correct your spelling
safety
 issues as well, seat belts
does
Correct subject-verb agreement
do
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 not work
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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main
Correct article usage
the main
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 door
censor
Use the right word
sensor
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 works rarely.

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task response
In task response, you should clearly state the problem, how it affects you, and what you want the company to do. The current letter only notes problems; add the effects on you and a clear request.
coherence cohesion
In coherence and cohesion, use separate paragraphs for each idea, start with a brief opening, and end with a polite closing. Correct grammar in each sentence so the message is clear.
greeting
The letter opens with 'Dear Manager' which is a proper greeting.
content
The writer mentions the two main issues: lateness and safety.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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