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In many countries,people are now living longer than ever before. some people say ageing population create problems for government.Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having angeing population outwight the disadvantages.

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an ageing
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 population is
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 of the most conspicuous issues. Yet, the issue of whether the drawbacks of
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 trend are eclipsed by its benefits
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has become an integral part of
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a contentious
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 never-ending debate among people. It is my opinion that
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 elderly citizens
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have
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a myriad of undeniable pitfalls,
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their
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advantures
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advantages
 are more
sifnificant
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significant
. The first
imressive
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impressive
 point to note is that
one
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 of the main benefits of
elderly
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the elderly
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 population is
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that
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they can be the best
guide
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guides
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to young offspring to build
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a
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prospective future. Because, if they face up to
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 situations and
challanges
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challenges
 during their life
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,
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they can give perfect
advices
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advice
.
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, more
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professors in
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certain
fields are
olders
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older
, and they are leaders of new researchers because of
massive
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their massive
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knowladge
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knowledge
.
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, in many cultures, old people play a major role in traditions like being
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a
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matchmaker or organising
wedding
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weddings
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. Despite a huge number of
adventages
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advantages
 of
older
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the older
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 population,its downsides should not be overlooked. Most importantly, governments must
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pension
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pensions
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for a long time even though they did not do any
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 and
regularly
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 job during their
younghood
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youth
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. In
additions
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addition
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, if they suffer from serious illness and need
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a
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caretaker ,
this
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 might create financial problems for young families.
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, medical examination and drugs may seem too expensive for generations who
has
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have
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 recently started
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their
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career
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careers
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. In
light-above mentioned
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facts
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one
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, one
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 can reach a conclusion that despite some
negarive
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negative
 sides, looking after and providing adults with
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an acceptable
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 lifestyle is
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 of the important duties of
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government and children.

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task
Plan before you write. Use a quick plan with two ideas for plus and minus, then give your own view at the end.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like and, but, also, then, after that to show how ideas connect.
structure
Make a short peice of close that restates your view and matches the start.
content
You show some good ideas, like old people can guide young folks.
content
You bring up real costs like pensions and care.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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