Nowadays, most information is available online, whereas in the past knowledge was used to be stored in books and on paper. Do you think the advantages of this situation outweigh its disadvantages?

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play
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an important role in
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digital era. Most
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people
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searching
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for any
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information
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online,
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20 (
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twenty
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books, paper and
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used.
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digitalization
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had
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so many
impact
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in
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our daily activities, everything seems
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with online
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strongly agree with
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write down my opinion below.
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recent years,
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hard to find
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valid
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some news
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lately
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people
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has
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hit by
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a tsunami
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disaster almost 200.000
were died
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people
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because of the disaster
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one knew
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incident would happen until the seawater
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into the land.
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, now online
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useful for giving
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as earthquake BMKG can
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advantege
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advantage
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any disaster
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from
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social media
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everyone
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know
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furthermore
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, online
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the education
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world
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for student
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student
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students
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teachers
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a few
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books became
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a source
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of
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for learning, studying and doing their tasks.
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class
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no one
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laptop
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or
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support their study,
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students
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only bring books and
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take
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note
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digitalization
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people
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internet
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the internet
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for the main
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for their study.
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conclusion
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plays an
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important
role
for
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our daily
activites
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activities
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enthough
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although
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also
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had
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a negative impact
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however
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however,
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as human
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beings
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being
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we
cant
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can't
avoid most of our daily activities supported by internet
information
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structure
Plan your writing. Make a short intro, 2 or 3 body ideas, and a simple end.
focus
Keep one main idea and give a clear reason or example for each.
language
Use easy words and small sentences. Check spelling and grammar.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas. Use order in each paragraph: one idea per paragraph.
idea
You show a view and want to stick to the topic.
content
You give a few examples in your draft.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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