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university education should focus mainly on practical skills rather than theoretical knowledge. Do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays
, a lot of
people
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 are studying and
recieve
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receive
 education in university to learn
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various
skills
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 and theoretical wisdom. High level of education in
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college
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 needs to
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concentrate
 on some
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capabilities
 to practice more than studying
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apply
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theory.
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essay
 will agree
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this
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 opinion. One of the reasons to agree
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this
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on this
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 topic is that students want to get new
skills
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 that help to get a job and handle
problems
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beacause
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because
 when companies hire new
emploeese
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employees
 they check their career and information, which university they graduated and what kind of major they finished. It
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prove
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proves
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 their working
capabilites
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capabilities
. If university education
is focusing
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focuses
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 on teaching
knowledge
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 more than
spesipic
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specific
skills
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 of
major
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a major
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,
the
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people
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 cannot
make
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achieve
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 good results. I think when
people
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 face some
problems
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 in
workplace
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the workplace
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, practical
skills
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 are more useful than theories and
knowledge
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 to solve
problems
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.
Anather
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Another
 opinion to agree
this
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statment
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statement
 is that major
knowledge
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 and theories have to be basic parts when they are studying or learning their majors
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such
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, such
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 as
technolog
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technology
, teaching, driving, and cooking. If someone starts something new without theoretical
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, it is going to be a very difficult way to do that
one
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apply
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.
Noone
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 can make
perfact prosesses
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perfect processes
 with only
wisdon
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wisdom
 and information.
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,
people
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 cannot even start anything except basic
knowledge
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 and theory. So after
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 hard roots we need to start to learn mainly
skills
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. In conclusion, I strongly agree
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with this
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beacuse
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because
skills
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 are more important than theories when they face
problems
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. And
knowledge
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 should be beginning
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an aducational
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aducational
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educational
 system
need
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needs
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 to target mainly
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the experts
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experts
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experts'
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skills
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 and
capabilites
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capabilities
.

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planning
Plan before you write. Make a small start that says what you think, then give two or three clear points, and end with a short finish.
structure
Put each idea in its own part. Start with a simple line for each idea and then add one fact or idea.
coherence
Use small links to join ideas: first, also, then, and, so. Do not start a new idea without a word to tie it.
grammar
Check how you spell the words and what you call the tenses. Use the easy words and short lines.
vocabulary
Keep the words plain. Do not use big or hard words. Read the text aloud to hear what is easy and what is not.
task
You show a clear view that the work in uni should focus on skills.
coherence
You begin to say how skill links to work, even if a bit rough.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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