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The graph below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The bar charts show the percentages of
males
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 and
females
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 who received secondary and higher
education
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 in four regions of the world.
Overall
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, Europe had the highest figures in both levels,
while
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 Sub-Saharan Africa had the lowest.
In addition
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, the difference between men and women was small in most regions,
although
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 some gaps can be seen. In secondary
education
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, almost all people in Europe completed
this
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 level, with about 100% of
females
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 and slightly
less
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fewer
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males
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.
By contrast
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, in Sub-Saharan Africa, only about
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one third
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one-third
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 of men and around
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one fifth
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one-fifth
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 of women finished secondary school. In Latin America, the figures were close to
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one
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one-half
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half
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 for both genders, with female students slightly higher. In East Asia, around
three fifths
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three-fifths
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 of
males
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 completed secondary
education
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, compared with about
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one
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one-half
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half
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 of girls. In higher
education
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, Europe again had the highest proportions, at just over
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one
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one-half
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half
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 for
females
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 and about
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one
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one-half
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half
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 for
males
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. In Sub-Saharan Africa, only around
one
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 quarter of women and
one
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 fifth of men studied at
this
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 level. In Latin America, about
two fifths
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two-fifths
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 of male students had higher
education
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, which was twice as much as
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the females
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females
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female
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 figure. In East Asia, both genders had the same figure, at around
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one third
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one-third
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. (21 min/ 205 words)

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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, education, one, half with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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