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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The data about
annual
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the annual
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 manufacturing of
milk
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 in four regions in the period between 1990 and 2010 is provided in the table below.
Overall
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, the Netherlands had the biggest amount of produced
milk
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 over the years, and Australia had almost
same
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the same
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 number at the
beggining
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beginning
. The share of
milk
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 in Guatemala had a sharp increase
comparing
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compared
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 to the first year. Talking about
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and Australia, the former produced 11,262,000 litres of
milk
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 in 2010, having a slight fluctuation in 2000, but remained
being
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apply
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the country with the largest
number of
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apply
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milk
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.
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production.
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 The latter, which was almost the same as
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 at the beginning, had a dramatic decrease in 2010, and the volume went down by almost 2 million litres, remaining 9,165,000. The countries with the smallest amount of manufactured
milk
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, Tanzania and Guatemala, increased the share of the product. Tanzania, which had 87,000 in 1990, doubled its number in the latter year, which
was
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There was
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 a significant increase. Considering Guatemala,
which
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whose
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milk
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 production
propotion
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proportion
 was 3 times lower, had a rapid change during the period and remained 84,000, meeting the starting point of Tanzania

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the tenth paragraph.
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