You recently moved to a new house and you want to invite an old friend to stay with you. Write a letter to your friend. In you letter, - invite him to stay and suggest a date - briefly describe the new house and garden - say why you like your new house. You should write atleast 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin you letter as follows: Dear Jimmy,

Dear Jimmy, I am so excited to tell you about my new house that I moved to recently, and I can't wait to invite you
immediatly
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immediately
. I will be very happy if you come to my house, because I can't describe to you every
details
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. You will
surprise
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of
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the free spaces I have in my home and how
much
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huge
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it is
huge
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apply
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. You will be amazed
with
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the unique furniture
,
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and the view of the landscapes. Alongside my garden, there are a lot of fruits
I
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that I
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will serve
it
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to you. I have a
convienint
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convenient
sofa in the
garden
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garden,
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we can
set
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sit
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there. I have a day off
on
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next Monday. Is it suitable for you to spend the night with me? because I want to spend time together until late
night
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at night
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. You have to ensure
about
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your schedule on that day. I will wait
to
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your response as soon as possible. All the best, Ruba.

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task response
You covered all parts, but some sentences are long and hard to read. Try to be short and clear.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphs. Start with an invite, then a short description of the home, then why you like it. Use simple links like 'also' and 'next' to join ideas.
tone
Friendly tone.
task response
Clear invite and date idea.
task response
Describes the house and garden with detail.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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