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in some countries, the cost livig rapidly increasing. what do you think may be the reasons for this? what effects might this have on society?

The cost of living is increasing rapidly in several nations across the globe. These are contributed
by
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 a wide range of factors
such
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 as economic progress, government national income through taxes and engagement in wars with
neighbors
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. All these activities show a profound negative effect on the country’s economy, causing severe problems
to
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 individuals in
societies
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society
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 Many nations around the world
lacks
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 significant advancements in science and technology.
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 leads to
substantial
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 decline in providing employment opportunities to
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. Governments’ primary revenue is through income tax from these employees.
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, many individuals completely avoid paying taxes through fraudulent practices to the government.
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, public organisations, in order to manage their
ruling
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 expenses, increase the prices of daily commodities, causing inflation.
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, several decades ago, European nations used to
developed
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 countries.
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, over
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time
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 they failed to strengthen their current economy through improvements in technology are now going to face
major
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 problem of inflation in
coming
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 years. With rising demands of costs, the lifestyles of individuals will be impacted severely. They face major challenges of affording basic amenities
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 as better education and quality health care.
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, high expenditures in daily life act as
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 deterrent to marriages among citizens
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, leading
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 to
massive
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 decline in population.
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, many metropolitan areas in North Korea are witnessing low birth rates
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 adults showing minimal interest in having children as
result
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a result
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 of high living
cost
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costs
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. Governments are introducing new reforms to control these alarming situations In conclusion, administrations of the nation play a crucial role in maintaining
the
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inflation under control. These include standard rules and regulations for collecting tax revenue and enhancing the infrastructure for developments in technology. If organisations fail to combat
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this
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these
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issues
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issues,
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 it creates
long term
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 complications for people

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planning
Plan the essay in four parts: intro, two or three body parts (reasons and effects), and a short ending.
coherence
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Use linking words like First, Also, Then, Finally to show order.
accuracy
Check facts. If you say a place has high cost, make sure this is true or say it as an idea or example.
language
Use simple, clear sentences. Watch grammar with s, is, are and keep to one idea per sentence.
content
You try to discuss both reasons and effects of rising costs.
structure
There is an idea of how taxes and spending link to prices.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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