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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph demonstrates the number of shopping
malls
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 that closed and the number of newly opened shops in a specific country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, in 2011, the openings of
malls
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 exceeded the
closures
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.
However
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, in 2018, the opposite happened, where the
closures
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 of
malls
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 overtook the openings. In 2011, around 8.000
malls
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 opened,
while
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 roughly 6.000 closed.
Then
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 it showed a dramatic decrease over one
year
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. Following the
year
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 2012, there was a steady annual rise,
mall
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 openings plateaued between the years 2015 to 2017,
then
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 experienced a slight fall in 2018.
On the other hand
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,
mall
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closures
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 fluctuated over the period. 2015 was the
year
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 with the fewest
mall
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closures
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. Following the
year
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 2015, there was a significant rise in
mall
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closures
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, where in 2016 around 5.000
malls
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 closed, and it remained steady until the
year
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 2018.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malls, closures, year, mall with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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