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Band 4

In recent years, there has been a rise in the popularity of second-hand clothing amongst younger generations. Why is this happening? Do you think it’s a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, youngsters primarily prefer to buy clothes
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second-hands
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. Some of them
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this
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 with protecting
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ecology, others like its cheapness and
possibility
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to find
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of finding
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 something interesting. Despite
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, second-hand clothing may be expired or
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low-quality
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, inappropriate or hard to use. Let`s see
positive
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 and negative aspects of
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 tendency. In
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, wearing somebody`s clothes was a trait of poor people, for whom it was too expensive to buy new clothing every time. In that case,
second-handed
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second-hand
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 clothes are much more affordable, useful and can serve for
few
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a few
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 other generations.
This
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 type of dressing is
also
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 quite beneficial for ecology -
nothig
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nothing
 will be
throwed
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thrown
 away if
was
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 not used for different purposes. Giving a new life to a
garments
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 is becoming a new trend for influencers, models and bloggers, who can wear something expensive, but not
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 by its host because of boredom.
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, others may disagree with
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 of
second-hands
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second-hand
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. Older generations are ashamed of using somebody`s stuff, in case of
capability
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the capability
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 to buy anything new for themselves. Those who believe in conspitological theories
,
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 avoid
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due to
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a
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 negative energy of things
utilized
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 by others.
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,
everyone
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 of them
agree
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agrees
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 on the fact that any good should be used by its designated owner, without any exchanging, selling and buying for
second
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a second
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 time.
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, the second-hand clothing is primarily a positive development, which is not harming anyone in its purpose to exchange stuff between people. Those who choose it to save the environment, money or cultural heritage
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 a great generation of
consious
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conscious
 people.

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task response
Shape your essay with a clear view from the start. State your view in the introduction and keep it in every paragraph.
grammar
Use short, plain sentences. Fix spelling and grammar to make your meaning clear.
coherence
Link your ideas well. Use simple words to show why things happen, how they affect people, and how they are linked.
content
Give one or two clear examples to back up your main points.
language use
Check your essay for nouns, verbs, and spelling errors like 'secondhand' and 'eco' terms. Aim to be consistent with terms.
content
You talk about both sides of the issue and say what you think at the end.
structure
The essay follows a basic layout: intro, body, and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Pre-owned garments
  • Affordable
  • Vintage
  • Mainstream
  • Mass-produced
  • Online marketplaces
  • Self-expression
  • Recycling
  • Consumption model
  • Hygiene issues
  • Counterfeit products
  • Cultural shift
  • Materialism
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