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Writing Samples
Band 3

More and more business meeting and business training have taken place on the internet. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages

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outweigh
 the disadvantages in virtual sessions and have more benefits for the
employeers
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employees
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employer
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employers
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 too. A major advantage of the virtual
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 the rate of attendance, because the
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attend
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enable
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employees
have
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, in my work,
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training
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are
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internet
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the internet
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 because we have and hybrid schedule, and the
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employees
 attended more virtual
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 than the
presencial
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in-person
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 the corporation
have
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, one disadvantage
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 is that the trainers
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development
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.
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 can be fixed with ludic activities in sessions
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. Nowadays,
exist
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 for interaction with our partners. In conclusion, even
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leave
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human interaction
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side
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, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages because the
workers
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 assistance is better, and the drawbacks can be fixed with different tools. I strongly believe that the benefits far outweigh the drawbacks.
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The benefits
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 far outweigh the drawbacks.

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structure
Be sure to have a clear idea in each paragraph, and use a simple plan: intro, one point, one example, then a short end.
language
Fix grammar and spelling. Use plain words and short sentences to avoid mistakes.
content
Use one real example and explain it a little. Do not run two ideas in one line.
style
Use punctuation to join ideas. Short sentences help readers see your point.
style
Keep a formal tone and check capital letters and verb forms.
content
The essay shows a clear view that online training has more good than bad.
content
There is a real example from work to support a point.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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