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Band 4.5

A friend from another country is moving to your city for work. He / she has asked you for advice about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • suggest an interesting part of the city to live in • describe the public transport in your city • say how your friend can meet new people there

Dear Sam,
Hi
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Hi,
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Sam
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Sam,
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 I can tell
about
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you about
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 my city. I
to
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need to
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 do a
check list
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checklist
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 with some important information about my city and what is great to know
in
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at
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 the start.
Firstly
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, I would like to tell you about
location
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the location
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 in
city
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the city
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.
The one
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One
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 of the excellent
location
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locations
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 is central. In
central
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centrally
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 located good apartments, parks and shops for
beginner
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beginners
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, and you can go
of
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to
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 different parts very easily because all is
near
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nearby
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.
Secondly
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, I want to tell you about public transport. We have a lot of stations for
buses
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 and trolley
buses
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, and for each
station
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station,
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it’s
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there’s
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 a personality schedule.
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Also
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Also,
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 we have a good app for public transport in
what
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where
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 you can see which
trip
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trips
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 are ours
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buses
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, buses
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 and trolley
buses
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, how long you need to drive, and how
many
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much
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 time
for
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until
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next
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the next
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 transport.
Thirdly
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,
If
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if
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 you want to make new friends, you can go to the park or to the cafe.
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However
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However,
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 you need to be careful because some people can
decayed
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decay
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. I'll be waiting for you
,
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.
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 I hope
this
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 helps you and is useful. Take care.

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Try to keep one main idea in each paragraph and give one clear point for the reader.
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Use more linking words to move from one idea to the next, and check the order of thoughts.
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Make each paragraph about one clear idea: where to live, how to travel, and how to meet people.
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Be sure to answer all parts of the task and keep a simple tone so your friend can read easily.
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Keep a calm and friendly tone and fix common grammar errors
tone
Friendly tone in the letter
content
Gives useful tips about buses and how to meet people
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