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It is better for students to live away from home while studying at univeristy than to live with parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree ？

Many students still hesitate to live away from home or live near their
parants
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parents
 during college level. I strongly agree to live far from home. There are many
reason
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 why they should stay on their own in college life. The following
eassay
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essay
 will be explained.
Firstly
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It
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 will be their first time to rely on themselves. They will learn how to conduct
theirself
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such
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, such
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 as transporting, making new friends, or doing whatever
they
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interest
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to do
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them
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.
For example
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They
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 will have freedom to make a decision what they want to do
for finding
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 themself.
Additionally
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this
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 is an option that they can rely on themself when they become
full
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 adult in future.
Furthermore
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, they should have their live without parents. When they grow up, they will have their own family, so
this
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 is a good start to let them have a right
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 living because parents can't take care of them for
whole
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 life. So it is an advantage for them to start their own life.
To conclude
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Living
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living
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 far away from family during
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college
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apply
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is an advantage
than
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over
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 living near parents.
Thay
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They
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 can start and conduct themself for
first
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 time
bacause
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because
They
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 have to rely on their own when they graduate.

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content
State your view clearly in the intro and finish with a clear conclusion that restates your main point.
structure
Give one main idea per paragraph and add a short reason or example for each.
language
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, and then. Use short, plain sentences.
content
The writer shows a clear view of the topic.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
content
Some ideas are about real life and are related to the prompt.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • self-reliance
  • life skills
  • manage finances
  • distractions
  • quiet study environment
  • social skills
  • sense of community
  • diverse backgrounds
  • time management
  • balance academic responsibilities
  • household chores
  • social activities
  • mature
  • sense of responsibility
  • financial burdens
  • utilities
  • affordable
  • emotional support
  • comfort
  • homesickness
  • stress
  • personal growth
  • handle challenges independently
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