The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart provided illustrates the
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of
visitors
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4 different museums in London from June to October in 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the Birtish
museum
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reached a peak in August,
while
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the National
museum
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showed the smallest
figure
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in August.
Furthermore
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, the
figure
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for the
British
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museum
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increased before a peak,
then
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the
number
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of
visitors
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decreased towards October. Looking at the bar graph more closely, one can see that the Science
museum
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stood the highest at 430,000 in Jun,
while
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the
British
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museum
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represented 420,000.
However
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, the
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of people visited the
British
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museum
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surpassed the other figures in July,
then
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it reached a high of 720,000 in August. The
figure
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for the
British
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museum
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remained the highest
number
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of
visitors
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for the rest of the period. Meanwhile, the National
museum
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stood the lowest
number
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of
visitors
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and it remained the fewest
number
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of people visited over the time.
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, the
number
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of
visitors
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in History
museum
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surpassed the science
museum
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once in August,
then
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it declined by 200,000 to 400,000 in September; it stayed the third largest
figure
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during the time.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, museum, figure, british with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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