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Band 6

Write to your friend informal letter because the public library three week close this month

"Hey Monica, Hope you’re doing well! Did you see the message about the
library
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 closing from the manager? I recently got the message, and I was a bit disappointed because I was planning to go to the
library
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 to prepare for my exam. I think the
library
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 should add more books on school subjects. It would
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 be better to improve the heating system for the cold weather. What do you think would be best for our
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? See you, Maftuna,

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coherence
Put one idea per paragraph. The letter moves from closing to ideas quickly. Start with the message about the library closing, then add your wish list, then ask her what she thinks.
task
Add more clue for why the changes are good. Give one or two small examples like more science or math books, and a warmer place to study.
tone
Keep the simple, friendly tone. Check punctuation and the name 'Monica'.
tone
Warm and friendly tone.
content
State aim clearly and ask a question.
content
Shows concern for library and care about study time.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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