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the diagram shows Stages in the Life Cycle of a Frog

The diagram illustrates the whole process
regarding
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 how the life cycle of
frogs
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 occurs. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
,
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apply
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 the process consists of several stages
including
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, including
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frogs
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frog
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 mating, eggs, tadpole, froglet, young frog and adult frog. The procedure begins with
frogs
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 mating and
ending
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ends
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 with
adult
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an adult
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 frog.
According to
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 what is shown in
diagram
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the diagram
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, the first step starts with
frogs
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 mating where they form eggs together. Afterwards, they wait for 7-10 days to get into the tadpole where they find feed stock under water sources.
Thereby
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, 6-9 weeks’ time is needed for them to evaluate and
get bigger
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grow
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 in terms of size.
Thereafter
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,
froglet
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froglets
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 commence to
breath
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breathe
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. In the final stage, they become
a
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apply
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young and live in the land. Intriguingly, their life duration is just 4 years
and
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, and
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 in the final stage, they become an adult.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words frogs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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