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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present

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The maps demonstrate the transformation in the Ryemouth village between 1995 and its current layout after construction. In general,
it is clear that
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 the village underwent a major modernisation, as it showed with the addition of housing and
introduction
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the introduction
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 of several residential services.
Although
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,
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apply
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 a number of facility was completely removed and replaced, some others remained relatively unchanged. In 1995, there
were
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was
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 a housing
area
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 in the
north
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northern
 part, a farmland and a forest park in the east.
Otherwise
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, in the southern
area
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 existed some commercial blocks and a hotel along the coastline, and
fishing
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a fishing
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 port on the sea. After the construction had
been
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taken place, the southern
area
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 underwent a significant change, which can be identified by removing
fish
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the fish
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 market and port,
then
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fourt
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four
 flats and
parking
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a parking
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 lot near
hotel
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the hotel
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 were erected. The replacement of shops with restaurants was
the
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apply
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another notable alteration. With regards to
eastern
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the eastern
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area
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, farmland and forest park were fully diminished,
likewise
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 two tennis courts and a
gold
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golf
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 course were built. The minimal transformation showed by northern
area
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, where the number of houses had been added. Simultaneously, a local motorway headed
to the
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apply
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west was paved
connecting
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, connecting
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 the new houses to
highway
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the highway
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.
Furthermore
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, a
cafetaria
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cafeteria
, a hotel, and prior housing areas stayed the same.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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