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The maps below show area in Austraa beachfront lia in 1950 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps compare an area in
Austraa
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the Australian
 beachfront
lia
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apply
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in 1950 with
it's
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its
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 current layout.
Overall
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, there have been significant developments in recreational, transport and accommodational facilities,
although
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 some parts, including a
beach
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, light hours, pavilion and
dinning
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dining
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 tables have
remain
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remained
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 unchanged. In 1950, there was a highway in the north of
area
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the area
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, which was linked to a car
perk
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park
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 to the right. Four dining tables were situated in the centre, surrounded by a
play ground
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playground
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 to the left and a pavilion to the right. A
beach
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 was located to the south, which was connected to two 25 m
pool
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pools
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: one of them is the east and another
in
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to
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 the west
,
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. Also
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also
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, a
light house
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lighthouse
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 was constructed
to
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at
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 the bottom of the area, linking to the
beach
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 from
east
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the east
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. At present, the main road has been increased the size
to
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on
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east
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the east
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 side, connecting to the
light house
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lighthouse
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.
Also
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, the
play ground
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playground
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 has been demolished to construct a minor car park, which is connected to the main road in the north east. A restaurant and a surf club have been constructed
in
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on
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 the left and right
side
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sides
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 of
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beach
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the beach
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, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beach with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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