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Band 6.5

The maps illustrate how a small village changed between 1986 and now.

The maps illustrate how a small village
have
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 been changed so far. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
,
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 the territory experienced a significant development throughout the observed period. The area transformed from
suburban
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a suburban
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 area to
more
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a more
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likely
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residential place, by bringing new buildings and removing some original features. In 1990, the town was in a simple layout. The large gardens occupied the eastern side of the village,
while
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large
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a large
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 house was located inside
of
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the garden.
Additionally
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, farmland was running through the main road,
whereas
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 there were 2 shops just next to the river stoke.
Furthermore
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, there was a post office which was situated near
to
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the shops and stood
at
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on the western side of the primary school. At the moment, the village witnesses notable modifications. The retirement home has replaced the place of gardens
,
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;
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 meanwhile,
large
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the large
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 house has been
destructed
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destroyed
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. More significantly, farmland has been destroyed
and
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, and
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 shops have been removed from the blueprint of
town
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the town
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.
Instead
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,
there has
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several spaces have
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 been created several spaces laying through the road

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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