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The map illustrates the changes that took place in the museum and its surrounding area between 1957 and 2007

The map illustrates how a small town changed between 1957 and 2007. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
,
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 the territory experienced a significant development over the years. The
area
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 transformed from a green
area
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 to a residential
area
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 by constructing new facilities and removing woodland. In 1957, it can be seen that, natural history exhibition was
laying
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lying
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 in the
center
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central
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 part of the town,
while
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 the local history room and the museum store-room were located on the west and east
side
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sides
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, respectively.
Furthermore
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, gardens and forests surrounded every side of the
center
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centre
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.
Following
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this
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, trees were situated on the edge
side
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of the main road
and
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 there was an entrance hall which was extended from the middle part of the road. Coming to the latest layout of the
area
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, deforestation can be observed throughout the period
and
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, and
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 new buildings
had
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 been constructed
instead
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 of
forest
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the forest
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.
In addition
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 to that, the local history room had been widened and covered by new facilities
such
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 as
café
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a café
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, museum shop, education
center
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centre
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 and special exhibitions. On the downside of the modified construction, there was a car park which was situated a bit far from
main
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the main
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 road.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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