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Demand for food is increasing globally.what are the problems faced by farmers.Give proper measures and causes

Nowadays, it is often argued that demand for
food
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 streamly increased around the world.
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,
in
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 that time we
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also can
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can also
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 observe how farmers face
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different
kind
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 of problems.
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,
this
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 essay aims to figure out
main
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the main
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 causes and
than
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then
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creating
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create
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 new
sollutions
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solutions
 for societies. One of the main reasons
,
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apply
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 why farmers and local business is faced with modern difficulties in
food
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 direction, it is climate
changing
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change
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 and everything related to global transformations.
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 can be clearly seen in worldwide businesses, which have a lot of
changings
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changes
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 in their system
for
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in
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 recent times.
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, some unexpected transformation in
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weather
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 forecast can have
enormous
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an enormous
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 impact on plants and
food
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, which
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effect
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on
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nations. After that, we can observe
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food
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the food
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 required among people , as they
also
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faced
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face
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with
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climate
challengings
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challenges
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 in different ways. So, humans ought to prevent these types of problems from
real
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becoming really
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 catastrophic, unless they want to deal with more issues. If we think outside the box, we may find crucial
sollutions
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solutions
 for
civilization
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civilisation
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.
Fisrt
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First
 of all, we should be aware of world problems and be ready to cope with
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them
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.
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, attract big countries and their governments
in
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to
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 these
question
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questions
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 or
creating
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create
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 special
organizations
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organisations
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.
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, make huge projects and one of them I can explain now. We probably should understand our natural resources and think
logical
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logically
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 about future climate conditions.
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, making global stocks of eat,
while
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 having poor
wether
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weather
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, it`s
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a magnificant
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magnificant
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magnificent
 maintain
of
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for
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 humans. In conclusion, taking everything into
account
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account,
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 I can say that
key
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the key
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 moment in
this
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 case is awareness of world transformations, which
some
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sometimes
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 times not expected and really
devastated
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devastating
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, but readiness is
large
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a large
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 part of wealth in
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food
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the food
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 system and for farms too.

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structure
Plan your essay first. Make one idea in each paragraph and link it.
coherence
Show cause and effect. Give steps to fix the problem. Each idea could flow.
grammar
Use simple grammar and check spellings.
content strength
Shows an effort to talk about causes and ways to help.
coherence
Has some linking words that help flow.
content strength
Wants to give action steps.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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