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Writing Samples
Band 3

In many countries, people are choosing to get married later in life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your opinion?

Marriage is a hard decision for
people
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in
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these days. Because they have to
concern
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in
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with
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 many factors.
Such
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 as financial, health.
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Nonetheless
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 there are many
people
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 who still want to marry or
having
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have
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 kids.
In
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 the one hand, many
people
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chose
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choose
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 to marrie with their love later because they have
a
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financial
problem
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problems
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, so they have to wait until they are ready
in
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their
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financial
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, because
of
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marriage costs a lot of money
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 having kids or
buy
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buying
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 a house,
then
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 they get married.
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, there are many
people
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wanted
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who want
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 to have fun in their early life, and
wanted
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want
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 to spend
the
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most of their life with freedom,
therefore
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 they
chose
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choose
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 to get married later in life.
In
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 the other hand, getting married later can cause a lot of
problem
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problems
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.
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, if you want to have children,
having
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being
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 old
ages
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will not be good for having kids because at
the
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an
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old
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older
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ages
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age
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 have a lot of health problems
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have
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having
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 no period or heart attack. In my eyes, marriage is
a
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an
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 important determinant for the world, because
in
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these days, the
amount
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number
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 of
new born
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newborn
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 babies
seem
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seems
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 to
decrease
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be decreasing
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 and
that
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which
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cause
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causes
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 a tremendous problem
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such
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, such
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 as having less amount of human resources. So I think we should start a public awareness campaign to make
people
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 aware of what is going to happen if the
amount
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number
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 of babies
are decreasing
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decreases
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.

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structure
Plan before you write. Start with a line that says what you will talk about and your view. Then give two or three points for each side and end with your view.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Fix big errors like 'marrie' and 'one hand' and 'in the other hand'.
content
Make your view clear. Say what you think about later marriage and its good or bad.
coherence
Make the flow smooth by using linking words like 'also', 'but', 'so', and 'therefore'.
content
Give better breaks and clear examples, such as the cost of a wedding or buying a home and the chance to have kids.
content
You talk about more than one idea and try to show a view.
language
You use simple words and it is easy to read.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marriage
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • personal growth
  • education
  • career
  • financial stability
  • mature
  • relationships
  • conflicts
  • couples
  • compatible
  • pressure
  • society
  • family
  • health issues
  • children
  • emotional stress
  • loneliness
  • isolation
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